Wednesday, October 12, 2011

Exercise 8.1

The draft is patch writing because it is still using the key words that the original author used in his text. The sentence structure that the writer used is also very similar to the original text.
Here is my attempt to eliminate the patch writing, and make it more like paraphrasing;
     Wikipedia is monitored by up to one thousand people that act as volunteers to make sure that the site is not tampered with by outside, non reliable sources. A problem has arisen that was presented in the Lowell Sun newspaper. It stated that Marty Meehan had his representatives replace the information that was given with content that was more flattering to him. As a result of this, the "Capitol Hill Wikipedia Blackout" occurred. This meant that all the computers that were connected to servers located at the House of Representatives were no longer allowed access to the site.

-Yuki Noguchi, "On Capitol Hill, Playing WikiPolitics," Washington Post 4 Feb, 2006: A1. Print

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